Presentation and Feedback

Below are the slides for my presentation:

For the presentation I got the following feedback:

It looks like it has been taken in a nightclub and there maybe something I could do with this.
It was interesting in the way that I look immersed in the music and to research the following on 'immersion'

Walker Evans - Subway

Philip Lorca diCorcia – Heads

Bettina Von Zwehl – Portraits of people listening to music

Lucy Levene – Ministry for sound

William Eggleston – Black and white club portraits

If I am restaging things I have seen in clubs then I should look at Jeff Wall's work and to see Bright and Cotton's books

To consider the notion of the social mask. 

My work acknowledges the slippage of the social mask which Sontag writes.
Music does have a way of 'affecting' us but how is this registered bodily? 

Research into theories of affect by looking at Affect Theory Reader. 

Berger's notion of 'who is looking at who?' 

Read Barthes (pg 10 Camera Lucida) notions of posing and being looked at. 

Peggy Phelan - performance and photography.
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I found this feedback extremely useful and I liked the idea of immersion. I don't want my portraits to be awkwardly staring at the camera, or to do deadpan shots, but rather to have them being absorbed and immersed into the background like they would do in a nightclub or whilst listening to music.
I would like the photos to feel as though no-one was watching them.